Chapter 58: Has the character changed?

Hasegawa, sorry, this guy is my friend. He has some problems with his head, he shouldn't have done anything he shouldn't have done, right?

Hikiya Hachiman suddenly ran over from the side, pulled Yoshiki Kakiza and apologized to Hasegawa

Is he your friend? Since that's the case, it doesn't matter. Hasegawa waved his hand generously

Thank you so much. Actually, this guy Kakizuo is also writing novels, but the novel he wrote is very bad. Whether it is not posted online or looking for people to read in reality, no one will think that the light novel he wrote is good. As for publishing, it is even more impossible, so he is a little troubled. After knowing that I wrote a light novel that can be published under your guidance, I want you to give him guidance. Hikigaya Hachiman hurriedly explained

So that's it, Ah, then, Kazuo classmate, where is your light novel? Did you bring it? If possible, let me read it first. Hasegawa expressed his understanding, and then said to Kazuo Yoshihiro

This is the light novel written by Iwo. Please read it. Yoshihiro Kakizu forced his way of speaking in half modern and half ancient Chinese, and at the same time handed a thick stack of manuscripts to Hasegawa.

After reading the manuscript, I expected that the number of words would be quite large, and I had to look like 200,000 or 300,000 words. I could write so much even if I couldn't get published. This guy's creation of light novels can be considered a true love.

Hasegawa thought so, and then read the novel of Yoshihiro Taniki

Just as soon as it was opened, Hasegawa couldn't help frowning, because it was a lot of settings, pure settings, and no story content at all.

Hasegawa quickly flipped a few pages, and still had the same settings as before, such as the character settings, the story settings, the power system settings, the world view settings, etc.

After turning over more than ten pages in a row, finally, the settings in this guy's novel finally came to an end.

Hasegawa looked up at Yoshihiro Kakizu. This guy, Kakizu Yoshihiro, was looking at Hasegawa with a nervous look on his face, and even cold sweat broke out on his forehead.

Keep reading

But although this is the beginning of the story, Hasegawa couldn't help frowning again, because, let's not talk about the others, what is the order of such messy sentences?

The way of saying the statement is inconsistent, the sentences are completely inconsistent

Then, there are a lot of typos

In addition to typos, Hasegawa found that there are also many difficult-to-write or difficult-to-read words in it.

Even Hasegawa still feels particularly awkward and stiff when you read it

Frowning, he looked up at Yoshihiro Kazuki again. The guy became even more nervous as if his thick palms were constantly wiping the sweat on his face.

Let's bear it, Hasegawa said this to himself, keep reading

The boring plot is dull and has no ups and downs at all. I want to write a sense of humor on purpose, but when I read it, I don’t feel any sense of humor at all. Instead, I feel boring and boring. Hasegawa can’t even calm down and read this novel

Finally, Hasegawa couldn't help but put the novel down

That, Hasegawa, how about my novel? Yoshiki Kazuki looked at Hasegawa nervously and expectantly

How to say it, in fact, I am not willing to speak. Hasegawa is a little hesitant: Because, very, very bad, this is the worst novel I have ever read

When Kakizusa Yoshihiro heard Hasegawa's comment, his face changed. His fat right hand pressed his undulating chest.

First of all, the format of the novel is completely wrong. This is a novel, not a game. Why do you write so many settings at the beginning of the novel? It makes people have no intention to continue reading it. Hasegawa said mercilessly

That, I, I just, I just want everyone to know the settings in the previous novel. After all, if readers don’t know the settings in my novel, they will definitely feel inexplicable. Yes, I just want the readers to understand the novel I wrote. Yoshihiro Kakizuma argued

Can't you substitute these settings into it when telling a story? Substituting them bit by bit and revealing the settings bit by bit not only makes readers feel boring, but even arouses the curiosity of the readers. Didn't you expect this kind of approach? Or do you have no confidence to write well? Hasegawa said politely: Sorry, you may have spoken a little directly, but I think your current situation is a serious disease, so it needs to be severely cured. I need to explain your problem clearly first, and then, how do you change it? Or if you don't want to write a novel, it's good to do it, at least you can understand your situation earlier. Hasegawa said to Yoshihiro Tsitogisa

Hachiman, who originally thought Hasegawa's way of speaking was a bit vicious, suddenly realized when he heard Hasegawa say this.

Think about it, Hasegawa said this, it seems that it is correct

At least let Yoshihiro Kazuki realize his true strength so that he can make a choice based on his own strength.

Thinking about Yoshihiro Kakizuki's personality, Hikigaya Hachiman thinks that if Hasegawa speaks more tactfully, Yoshihiro Kakizuki probably won't listen to it.

So, Kazuki classmate, do you want me to continue? Hasegawa looked at Kazuki Yoshihiro and asked

Yoshihiro Kakizu was wrinkled and thought hard. Finally, he looked at Hasegawa, and then looked at Hakigaya Hachiman. Hachima nodded at Yoshihiro Kakizuya

OK, okay, please continue to advise you to continue talking, go, I listen, Yoshihiro Kazuki's expression is firm, as if he is going to step onto the guillotine and be loyal to his righteousness.

This guy really will add a show to himself

Hasegawa rolled his eyes: In addition to the settings at the beginning, your sentences are also very inappropriate, giving people a feeling of confusion and messiness. You, high school, no, in junior high school or even elementary school, have you never studied Chinese well? I feel that even a composition written by a middle school student or a primary school student may be smoother than you wrote.

Yoshihiro Kazuki covered his undulating chest again, looking painful

Then, if you have typos, some of the most basic words that are not accurate, you should return to the country, no, it is the primary school to start learning from the heart.

Yoshihiro Kazuki has already kneeled on the ground

Also, why do you need to use a lot of uncommon words in the text? Readers don’t know or understand rare words at all. Why are you writing this? Are you trying to test your readers? Sorry, I think there are probably no readers in articles like yours...

Yoshihiro Kazuki has already fallen down

Also, you should have read light novels, but why, your story plot should be arranged like this? Is there any new meaning? Why do you set your story like this? Old-fashioned, bloody, and even disgusting plots that are already disgusting, you use so many and so frequently here. If your writing skills are excellent, it would be fine to be able to write the old-fashioned content into new ideas, but you have no ability at all...

besides……

Hasegawa points out the mistakes in the writing of Yoshihiro Kazuki nodded.

Looking at Yoshihiro Kakizu

To be honest, Hasegawa felt a little guilty, he was not the kind of person who was particularly sarcastic.

This is why

On the one hand, Hasegawa really doesn't like the strange middle school image of Yoshihiro Kazuki

Another point is that for a person who prefers reading, he saw a very bad piece of content that even felt disgusting like shit.

I really can't control my emotions

Furthermore, Hasegawa also thinks that Yoshihiro Kazuki should recognize himself earlier

Either learn to write from scratch or start wrapping lines now, this will not delay himself

Just like Yui Yui from the beginning

Hasegawa knew that there was no benefit in her continuing to study in school, so Hasegawa pointed out this very clearly, allowing Yuhihama Yui to choose her favorite profession, and Yuhihama Yui finally chose to enter the entertainment industry.

So, because of the fact that this guy, Yoshihiro Tanikisa, is a friend of Hikigaya Hachiman, Haseikawa pointed out directly

As for why not be more tactful?

Haha, a fat boy who is very accustomed to his behavior, is he gentle to him?

I'm so sorry, Hasegawa can't do it

For the time being, let's talk about this first. Hasegawa finally felt a little soft-hearted. Looking at Yoshihiro Taniki's appearance that had been hit hard, Hasegawa shook his head and finally chose to stop. He wouldn't talk about the remaining half of the shortcomings.

Ah! I will not give up Hasegawa Kei! I will remember your advice for the time being, but I will never give up. I will come to you when I am waiting for me. This guy, Yoshihiro Taniki suddenly jumped up, shouted at Hasegawa, and then turned around and ran out.

Looking at this guy's figure, Hasegawa was a little speechless. Such a person's face is really thick enough. Hasegawa felt that his venomous tongue was a little too cruel.

But this guy was completely resisting. Is he so nervous or is he thick-skinned?

Sorry, Ah Haseikawa, he is a little thicker. Hikigaya Hachiman said to Haseikawa with embarrassment

It doesn't matter. Although Kazuo's novels are nothing, his perseverance is pretty good. After all, he can still write so many words without being recognized by anyone.